I like the first sentence, if I can call it that. I think "fuming hatred" is very evocative and the image of the paint is a nice one. I also like the way you've split it up - I think you positioned it well.

The second sentence, if I can call it that, doesn't seem to have quite the same power. The "paint" image is quite innovative whereas I find the second "sentence" a bit cliched. It feels like an anti-climax. Also, I think to heighten the suspense you might want to end-stop the second to last line with a comma.

- Esther, currently reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon (link in my profile)

YAY great message