Wow - powerful writing. This is great. I relly like it. Although it does not rhyme everywhere, it flows very well. Great job!!

Could you possibly review my Vampire story (don't worry - not a cheesey 'vampire-falls-in-love-with-human-girl' story! I would be really grateful if you did!
Anyway, once again - great writing and poem.
Thanks,
♥ Bella ♥
x

That was beautiful! I love the rhyme scheme, and definitely loved the imagery. Instant fav! Keep writing!