Wow, brilliant ending! You had me giving up hope for a second there, but i love how you ended it with the promise of the relationship, and not a full-out reunion, and though i wanted to see them reconcile it was a perfect ending. This was such a great story, im not usually a fan of writing like this where theres lots of internal monologues (i think thats what its called) and direct thoughts to the reader, but i loved this! I think because the content was so great, Evan and tom were always so on and off and there was such passion in their their relationship that you had me so sucked in that i had to see what would happen. I like how this a romance story but its very real and raw, ive read lots of stories in this genre, many different types, but nothing quite like this. Both tom and evan are very strong and well-deveoped characters, and i think tom is one of the most well-written protagonists ive ever read, you really get a sense of who he is when youre reading. :D

cute. lol :)

this story is hilarious!

Wow! I got completely sucked into this story-you did such a great job putting the reader inside Thom's head I had to read it straight through to find out what happened to him. I'm really glad you decided that he and Evan were going to give it another go at the end, I was really rooting for them the whole time.

What I really liked about this was how you made them both into three dimensional characters. And the way things happened without you having to force their personalities into it just because you want a certain thing to happen. It really felt like you were telling a story instead of writing one if that makes any sense. I also like how you didn't need to have a complicated plot in order to keep interest in the story.

On the other side, I skipped many paragraphs (at least one a chapter) where Thom was rambling about something in his own head. It was kind of hard to make myself go through them when I know it didn't really do anything for the story either way.

This is a perfect example of why I read slash - I can't stand typical female responses and mannerisms in a romantic setting for some reason. The only real problem I had with this was that it would have been nice to have a real final scene where they worked things out, instead of one line, because I really felt their miseries and confusion and felt distinctly short-changed when I realised the story was done and just kind of left me hanging there, wondering. Personally I prefer to be done with a story when it finishes. But I notice you did the same thing in "With Intent", so maybe it's just how you like to write and I'll have to deal with it, because your stories are utterly brilliant, and once I start reading them, I cannot tear myself away from them.

Or maybe I'm just not used to story titles actually fitting the story itself...

Hi, so I didn't get around to your story and I noticed it was completed... I truly loved the story.

I think it was a very understated and appropriate ending. For a moment there I feared George was going to be the safe choice but then a daring phone call. You left enough to the reader's imagination.

Thanks

Really a great, great story. The ending is perfect, the characters and the story really well built. Though it is probably cruel of me, I like the fact that Georges' problems are noot resolved by the end of the story - it's much more realistic, I think. I'm not into real-life romance-only stories, but yours is definitively worth the read!

One of the most amazing stories I have every read.
I don't have much to say other than that.
Thank you for writing this.
S

This story is amazing. So harrowing and so complex. The feeling it gives you is heart-breaking. The way the main character keeps analysing situations and keeps seeing into the future and avoiding things he knows what it will turn into. It sounds so human and real. And that makes this story interesting till the end. I'm glad the ending is like this because the more you will see, the more you'll get bored and annoyed of all of the **. I'm not going to say I enjoyed reading it but I liked your writing style. And I couldn't help but draw more into the story. It's truly inpirisational for a writer like me. And I hope you write more stories like this if you get ideas.
Oh and yeah, I love the characters. George is my fav.

for a moment there I was like "That's it?" but once it all sunk in I think that it was the perfect ending, Its hard to explain (I'm not even going to try. I will end up rambling about something completely random.) but I really do think that.

Fantastic story!! I love Thom's voice and I love how flawed all of the character's are!! So interesting and loveable :)

I love your style of writing!!

I love the realistic, slice-of-life genre, and I think you did a fabulous job with this.

he should just suck it up and grow a pair of balls :C evan = amazing

Really great- sometimes a little difficult to follow with the tense shifts, but the literary critic in me has decided that this is a ploy to make the reader as disoriented as Thom is, and if so, it worked. The characters were much more interesting and multifaceted than I had expected, especially Evan. Can I just say I think you might have been stalking me? At first I was amused that I gave someone nearly the same jaded rant on LGBT soc (your description of it, incidentally, is spot on) as Thom's chp 1 invective just the other day. Then it got to the bit about struggling through a thesis on 14th century rubbish nobody cares about and I decided Thom was a truly kindred spirit. But you're lucky I even read that far because I could barely get past my instinctive hatred for all things named Evan, having only recently recovered from an eerily, freakishly similar 'relationship' with one myself (up to an including screwing flatmates and exes, publishing ill-considered invectives in university publications, a party brawl, and yes, even swing dance lessons- only with my Evan merrily jaunting off to the Christmas break bus to Cardiff with me left crying on the train). I like your ending much better than mine, although now I suspect I know what all those CCTVs are really for. I was surprised to find myself rooting for the characters despite their faults, even Evan. I'm glad the ending wasn't too rose-tinted and final; it wouldn't have been realistic with characters like that. The slight hope is generous enough. I liked it a lot, and not just because it reminded me of me. I guess it just goes to show how incredibly believable and realistic the story was. Not to mention the setting, and your depiction of the gay dating scene, are some of the most honest I've ever read. Good job. Keep it up.