I liked the subject of this poem. It was an interesting choice and I think you picked up a number of good images. Your echoing piece is very simple but not trite. I liked the image of bleeding ink and of the pit.

I also liked the punctuation. You used it appropriately and had run-on lines only when it made sense to have them.

One thing I thought could possibly be improved is the structure. It feels like it needs to be broken into stanzas, to make the development of the poem clearer.

One small error I noticed was the spelling mistake in "wovenn".

- Esther, currently reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon (link in my profile)

Well said. *claps*. Write on!

~Anna~ ^_^

every word fits together so perfectly. like lock and key. great poem.