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| Zonne 2008-05-29 ch 1,  | abuseWow, that really touched something deep inside. What a prayer. What a fantastic closing line. The only confusing factor to me was that "He's tried to serve You" line mixed in with what seems a hurtful lifestyle. We are all prone to 'something' and if we can't manage it, we aren't serving Him. Just a thought. You said it's based on a true story. It seems to me she is a very patient and forgiving person. And very humble as well. Bravo |
| Tranquil Thorns 2008-04-19 ch 1, | abuseWhat a tragic situation. The line 'He’s only 48' really punctuates that. I really like the narration here, even though it is sad. The voice is believable and I feel for the situation. I'm actually reminded of a character in a book I have been reading lately, although the genre is fantasy and the plot entirely different. Great job here. (: |