| Reviews for The Fireman |
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simpleplan13 5/25/08 . chapter 1I have mixed feelings about the ending. I like it because it is so true. I dislike it because I can't believe after letting people die you would be ok with saying oh well everyone dies someday. Anyhow I like the descriptions of the situation in the rest of the piece. PS if you're bored today check your the Review Game and its Review Marathon (link in my profile) |
Kiwi-kiwi6 5/7/08 . chapter 1Interesting poem. It painted a picture from the fireman's point of view. Good job. |
East-0f-Eden 4/27/08 . chapter 1you're vividly descriptive. it reminds me of the firemen I know. |
Peanuts Factory 4/25/08 . chapter 1The ending caught me off guard.:) It's true, but we all hope.. |
Esther Jade 4/23/08 . chapter 1Review game! I liked the opening. I thought it had a lot of impact. I also liked the lines "fire burnt,.../...high". I thought you put in some nice rhythm at that point. I thought there could have been more structure to frame the development of the poem. It might be a good idea to put stanzas is. In the third to last line, I thought the "anyway" disrupted the rhythm in the line a bit. It just didn't sound quite right. |
Glowing Aura 4/21/08 . chapter 1Wow. That was sad, I think I got a little misty-eyed. I don't think I could ever take a job such as that. Not only am I a pryophobic, but I what I fear more...well, it's what this poem is all about. |
Starleaf 4/19/08 . chapter 1wow, i really liked this. especially the last two lines. i can only imagine how hard it would be to not be able to save lives, especially when its your job.. :\ Really good job with this one. I honestly don't have anything I'd change about it. |
Edensong 4/19/08 . chapter 1A little morbid and very sad. Nice use of description. Subtle but clever rhyming, I didn't notice the ABAB sequence until the second group. Keep writing! |
fatbird33 4/19/08 . chapter 1very powerful. nice job |