In the end, it's all about the daydreaming and deep, deep denial and the weird mix of hope and pessimism, right? So thank you for writing a poem about unrequited love that so many people can relate to. I know I can. (I'm actually writing a story about admiring from afar, so I'll definitely be looking to this to get the feeling that you were able to convey so well.) It would be nice to see punctuation, but other than that, you have a simple, clear style that I liked a lot. :)

I like that this poem has a strong ending because I found the beginning to be a little weak and lacking - it didn't draw me in like the ending did.

Again, I'll have to note that there is no punctuation in this - I don't understand why poets don't like using punctuation in a poem. Poetry is also a piece of writing so it is only natural that there is punctuation to it.

I didn't really like the first two lines because it didn't really like the logic behind it. If I'm getting this right, do you mean to say that looking away from someone is the reaction of a stupid girl? If so, then I didn't really like that this opinion was forced upon me. I find it quite natural that a girl will immediately look in another direction when their crush is looking right at her, but that's just my opinion.

-silv3rdr34ms
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I like your choice of diction, sophisticate but not superfluous.
The emotions you mention are indeed something others can relate to.

Very well done.
=)

this is pure amazing

This was a great poem! I'm so glad that there was no set rhyming pattern, and you weren't forcing words to rhyme. It was very insightful, a job well done! :-)

Mil

this sort of reminds me of my poem "journal entry." I think most girls have experienced this feeling. Liking someone who doesn't even notice. Simply put, this feeliing sucks. But i like the way you put it better. "repression is my defense mechanism of choice," because repression is not good, there is no need for defense in this situation, and it's not really a choice, is it? love it.