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| Sanity's Brink 2008-04-19 ch 1,  | abuseThis is good, but it seems more like an excerpt of a story. You should take this a bit farther and at least make it a lengthier short-story. You also need to add periods at the ends of your sentences. These couple lines are actually quite intriguing and interesting, but I don't think you could really consider it a story. Courtesy of the review marathon. |