 dragonflydreamer 2009-05-24 . chapter 1Wow, very powerful. Such a unique topic to address in poetry, but an important one.
I like your wording. It's descriptive, but not in a sexual way, and addresses the more emotional aspect of the issue.
[empty air between my legs]
I like that line. It kind of shows the general emotional emptiness aside from the literal meaning.
~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile) |
 BetteNoir 2008-08-25 . chapter 1This poem is very powerful. If it's about you, I completely respect the sort of things you have to go through. I am lucky enough to have men and women in my life who have gone through similar things, and they feel the exact same way. Good luck with everything if this is about you, and remember, for all of the jerks out there who want to stop you, there ARE people who will support you. |
 harrypotterstarz 2008-07-26 . chapter 1short but meaningful. |
 HMH 2008-06-02 . chapter 1Efficient images. |
 simpleplan13 2008-05-18 . chapter 1I think maybe this and the other one might make a good collection.
I like this one best actually.. calling them tumours is such a powerful and morbid image that is just perfect. Awesome job. |
 Doxology 2008-05-16 . chapter 1This seems like the kind of poem (or haiku I guess) that just comes to you one day (in a second) and you're like "omagod, that's brilliant!" so you like rush to write it down. I dunno, but I adore it. And it's going on my favorites.
Peace & Love
westnedge ~> park |
 Ashelin 2008-04-27 . chapter 1Excellant haiku! So many of them are just empty words (look at mine for instance) but there is a great power in this. Fitting something so big into so few words is hard, and you did a wonderful job.
Thanks for your lovely review, I'm glad to be back. :] |
 diffident 2008-04-27 . chapter 1This poem works well as a haiku. It's short but so powerful--great job.
marie |
 the face in the window 2008-04-21 . chapter 1i think i like this one better. amazing stuff.
rowan. |
 Misstress Nicole 2008-04-20 . chapter 1A man trapped in a woman's body. I like it, don't think I've ever thought of it in those words before. |
 Lachrymosa 2008-04-20 . chapter 1(From the Review Game):
This was an excellent haiku. I really liked the overall sad empty atmosphere in here. The last line suggest (very effectively) that this was more than just a physical change. It's as though the person has lost a chunk out of his/her own soul. |
 Faith Adeline 2008-04-20 . chapter 1Great piece, very good. One of the best haikus I've read on here :)
Faith |
 Untitled and Unfinished 2008-04-20 . chapter 1This was good, I'm usually not a big Haiku fan, but I think this summed it up!! Very good, but sad in a way too. |
 relapse into change 2008-04-20 . chapter 1man, i love you.
best haiku ever. |