 Doubting Thomas 2008-04-23 . chapter 1dude thats out*ingstanding, "A Canticle for the Heavenly Realms Realms of Heaven, star spangled glory—Fantastic hosts of long lost lore— Tangent pinpricks tell the story"
I love the intro. keep it up, you poetry keeps me going when I miss y'all |
 Jesse the Storyteller 2008-04-20 . chapter 1Beautiful imagery in this... I love the lines "They do sing with voices of thunder, throwing planets wild, asunder." The comma in this line seems unnecessary, though - "In unearthly dens, in the sky"
Also, the first line is repeated. Not sure if you noticed that.
-Jesse
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