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| East-0f-Eden 2008-04-20 ch 1,  | abuseI thought this was strangely beautiful. I loved your describtion but I don't understand why you want to be around rice and onions. |
| One-Hand Clap 2008-04-20 ch 1, | abuseI loved the last two lines for really bringing an interesting strain of thought to light, and I did, also, like the first two lines - in fact, I found those four lines I found favourable clever and funny - but I have to say that my like for this poem ended there. Maybe it's just a case of my own square-mindeness. But I did not understand the flow from 'I want to be around invention' to 'grapefruit, fishnets'. Especially since there was a comma in between, so if the lines were reconciled, it would read 'I want to be around invention, grapefruit, fishnets' which... Maybe it's just my mind, but I don't understand, and therefore, don't like (yes! je suis xenophobic :P!) - Clap Trap from Review Marathon [link in profile] |