I like the fact that you used no capitalization, it added a flare to your poem. You could really feel the emotion in your word choice, it's like you were being chained by your own uncontrollable feelings.

You sound so upset in this poem. I totally understand though. I hope everythings ok now.

And depite its' shortness, the emotions come across so well. Gettin upset can sometimes trigger writers' block. But it's only for a little while, I'm sure.

In fact, look at me. Okay, I'm not upset, but ever since my GCSE's last year, I havent written a single poem. For some reason, whenever I write, the rhyming is forced and doesn't flow well. So I'm biding my time, writing fiction instead. And actually, I'm enjoying it, lol ;)

Anyway, tc,

~mez~

I like the idea. I might be over analysing a bit here but I think the structure is quite fragmented which is clever because it relates to the meaning. That might not have been intentional but I liked it anyway.

all i can remember is all you've ever said.. .the repetition of all sounded odd to me. Maybe I can only remember all you've said or something?

I like this. I can definitely relate and I love the idea of your brain being filled with someone. Nice job.