I am so sorry. I can almost see your tears and heartache.

Aww sad .Good job, I like the repetition of 'twenty four hours'.

Wow. My heart goes out to you, your family and your grandfather. What a heartfelt and emotional poem. My only suggestion - although in your situation I wouldn't worry about it - is to keep a consistent rhyming scheme. Yours seems to go ABCB, ABCB, ABAB, ABCB, A.

Best of luck through this difficult time.

deep and sad...very meaningful. T_T It was good.