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| notated descant. 2008-04-20 ch 1,  | abusethis is a very intriguing piece. one thing i'd like to say is that you may want to seperate your ideas into stanzas. It seems you've already done so, but i know that when you upload a document to FP, it tends to destroy the formatting, so you should fix that up; it would be a lot more effective. Other than that, great piece... it's very abstract and leaves a lot to the imagination of the reader! |