 Tranquil Thorns 2008-04-20 . chapter 1This seems like a nice beginning to a fantasy story.
My only problem here is that it seems a bit too... generic? It's nicely told, don't get me wrong, but I've read a lot of starting-poems like these that basically hint at the same thing. Heroes, villains, true love - we've heard it all before.
I wish you would've put your own spin on this.
Also, 'Head' should be heed. =P
As ever, I don't mean to sound harsh, just truthful. |