neat chapter. i like the whole secrecy thing. It's good to finally see this updated. I can't wait to see what happens next chapter. please update again soon! :)

what a crazy girl. i wonder who she is and what she wants from her suitcase...this is really getting interesting. =] PLEASE update soon!

ha ha. KFC. that's great. I like the part in the lady's speach about the questions they can ask and won't want answers to. the guard stuff is cool too. =] update again soon =]

I really thought that i had reviewed this story before. did you take down any of the chapters and repost them?
oh well, i like your descriptions and your sense of place is very detailed. great work on this first chapter.