This is awesome, but kinda sad it hasnt been updated in so long. I really hope you update it one day.

All I have to say is LMFAO. I know it's like totally dramatic and serious, but totally funny. I really want to read how they escape! Please, please update!

I really like this story, it's very I have to say the romanian sometimes doesn't make sense,like "ceas tu insuti" actually means "clock yourself" but I doubt someone who doesn't know romanian would know and mind...I am just an evil person :)

:D

this is fun! both of them are idiots -_-

This story is amazing. Please update it whenever you have the time!

But I like Marshall's guitar.

I vote it gets smashed over the lady behind the desk's head.

I like this story. Mostly because Toma is Romanian and that is so badass. Because Romanian people rock.

You write very well. Your prose is direct, your storyline is most seriously entertaining. I like your characters quite a bit (see above). Oh yes.

Write more? Yes no?

*prods*

omg, lol!

I love Marshall- his reaction to everything is so hilarious, Toma is so cute! I feel like hugging them both and them laugh at them!

please update sooN!

This is fantastic. Hope to see more of it soon.

Oh, my god, you HAVE to update this story. It's got to be one of the best crime stories I've ever seen on FP. I really, really, really hope you continue this story, if you're still on FP, that is. So many favorite authors of mine have left recently or just disappeared. Well, keep writing!

This story is amazing. Made me want to keep reading until the very end. Very exciting.

o_0 I don't know how to get to the site...homepage isn't working...

Anywho, I'd love it if Marshall used his guitar as a weapon while they are chased. It could break while he's hitting a guy upside the head or something

Oh my gosh! This is amazing! Especially the whole murder thing.

. . . Yeah, so, I just saw The Dark Knight. It's good to read something like this right after watching it.

Wow! Brilliant story!

A romanian pop-star and a cynical teen? - Different! Very different! But so good...!

Here in england, we call Murphy's Law - The SODS LAW for obvious reasons... I have no idea where you live, but if it's somewhere else, do you share this name or is it not in use? (just out of curiousity)

Once again, brilliant story! Very interesting, I cannot wait to see what happens next!

O my god.

So good, so exciting, so everything! I love it!

I really love this so far! This is actually the first story I've reviewed on FictionPress, so I'm a little new to this. I'm happy it's a good story, though!

First off, I would like to start by saying that I love Marshall. He comes off as a very original and well-thoughtout character. Kudos for that. I love the gap teeth; it sounds adorable, and I love it when characters have a noticable flaw in their appearance. His cleanliness is also something I like. I'm also very organized...and color code my clothes.

I was annoyed by Paul - I really hate younger siblings! You did a really good job at showing the relationships between family members. Although I have a hard time imagining Marshall's father caring if he was gay...but I've only read the first chapter, so I probably don't have a great grasp on his character just yet. I suppose he did tell Paul that there was 'none of that' when he was talking about looking through Marshall's underwear, so I suppose he could be against homosexuality. Or perhaps Marshall is just very secretive and afraid of coming out; that's understandable because he is just a teenager.

But I've always said that there is a difference between accepting homosexuality in others, and then discovering that your child is gay/lesbian. So maybe his father falls into that catagory?

The details you add to this just bring it alive. Your writing is very engaging and makes me feel like I'm there with the characters! I love the entire idea for the story - the slash (fangirl, I guess), the characters, the summary, everything! This just sounds so interesting!

I also loved details about Marshall's past and how he discovered his homosexuality. I really hope that his old friend doesn't completely blow him off. It sounded like he was going to. I know how hard it is to be different and how it's nice to have a pillar, somone who truly knows you, and it seems like his friend was that to him. He was the only one that knew Marshall's secret AND was his first homosexual encounter. And then to discover that he's moved on and has a girlfriend! Poor Marshall. He probably feels really alone - the crying was completely justified!

Moving to New York would be confusing and frightening to someone coming from a small town. I've only been there for a short visit, and it was hard for me - so many people!

Once again, this idea is so unique and fun! I really can't wait to read the next chapters and see where you take this! You are truly talented - and I've only read the first chapter. You should be proud of this.

I hope you have fun writing this, because I know that I'm going to have fun reading and reviewing it!

(Wow, long review. D)

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