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| english summer rain 2008-07-07 ch 1,  | abusewow the images! beautiful, warms me up :) i especially like the last stanza, but then it made me think of the sun shining for some other kid on the other side of the world. anyway moving on, word choice is perfect, line breaks didn't break the flow. perfect in other words. great work! |
| SweetSin 2008-05-02 ch 1, | abuseYummy little poem. Quite passionate, like a fire. :3 |
| ville de diable 2008-04-22 ch 1, | abusei am in love with this. |
| Misstress Nicole 2008-04-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like the picture it paints. The words you use paints love. A forbidden love. But I would caution you against not using proper capitalization. Even if you don't want the first word capitalized the 'I's should never be lower cased. It makes it look sloppy and rushed. Other then that I think it's a great poem that has a lot of feeling. |
| losing gracie girl 2008-04-21 ch 1, | abusethe third stanza's wording is amazing. nice job. yours until the wind changes, gg |