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| Black-Telic 2008-04-22 ch 1,  | abuseVery powerful, moreso than I expected it would be when I clicked the link. The first two lines convey such need, nearly begging with us, that it really drew me in. Great imagery, too--I think I ached a little bit in sympathy to that middle stanza. Really nice use of repetition with the last line of every stanza. All in all, great job! :) |