Okay, so I've only finished the first chapter so far, but I decided to stop for a second and leave some feedback.

As I'm only in the first chapter, all I really have are compliments, so here we go:

1. This is a clever, fresh twist on a somewhat cliche-prone sci-fi sub-genre.
2. As simple as it sounds, I love the automatic conclusion the narrator draws as far as Earth = Dirt.
3. Kind of referring back to number 1...I also like the fresh twist on the stereotypical "alien body-snatcher." The narrator's just flat-out not interested in Earth. It's very refreshing to read about an alien who does NOT really want to take over the Earth.
4. On a more grammatical note, the writing is clean and concise, and the narrator flows very nicely. Just watch that you don't reveal too much too quickly, or go off an a tangent. (Not that you have, necessarily, but it looks like it would be easy to do with this narrator)

Thank you, and keep up the lovely work!

This review will be pretty fast. This is the last one for my obligation and I have somewhere to be. I'll be brief. The reunion between our protagonists was interesting (and partially entertaining) o say the least. The most important part is that while her disappearance isn't fully understood, at least it served a purpose plot-wise.

Quite frankly, if Tameryn had been around, her words would have convinced Holly to take other actions in the previous three and a half months. As for the beautiful Christmas gift? Well, any ulterior motive will just have to wait for another day. I have sleep to catch up on for tomorrow. Good night and good luck!

That's true. A story does not have to be all hearts and flowers. (Quite frankly, I have seen much of that at all in this story. It could do with some happiness without it ruining the premise of the story.) Anyways, as symbolically creepy as this chapter was, it didn't really do anything. It confused me, and I didn't learn anything.

On the plus side, at least we know where Tameryn has been for that last chapter. I was afraid that our poor confused protagonist would be forced to continue on without the help of her extraterrestrial friend.

It's like an epic story about trying to figure out what the hell his name is...oh, and probably something life-threatening as well. I liked this chapter. It's pretty obvious that out favorite seer has missed this chapter, despite being well and good in the previous. (Well, the ending didn't seem bright.). Her disappearance is important, right?

This was another good chapter, but very little happened in it. It seemed to be just as transition to the next, which I would assume will take place in Lemonjello's class. (We're you hungry when you came up with that, or were you just eating some when you were writing this chapter?) Regardless, it's a very funny name. It would be my pet peeve as well.

"Normal length is in the eye of the beholder, so the length of this chapter did not bother me at all. The fact that Holly seems to have accepted Tameryn as ever-present and never leaving seems a bit random. Its been a few weeks since the discovery, but it was just simply jumped as if nothing of importance happened. If that's the case, then Holly's acceptance came out of left field.

Something else came out of left fiend her, too, but this was a good point of the plot. (Prior to this, I was beginning to worry there wasn't going to be a plot). That boy with this thing is in contact with another nofra. And what the hell is that thing? Well, I must read to find out...

I am very disappointed that this chapter was so short. I'm more disappointed that nothing really happened in this chapter, nothing that couldn't have been trimmed and added to another chapter with a larger, or at least more cumbersome revelation.

The plus side is that the part of the plot that did grow grew well. Now we have an understanding between Tameryn and Holly. Well, as good as one as we're going to get for right now. Holly wants to keep the connection to a minimum. More importantly, she doesn't need others knowing about her imaginary friend. I wonder when Holly will discover the connection between her stalker voice and the missing time the day before? Only time will tell in this aspect.

The best part of this chapter was not the fight. I did love the fight, however. It was simple. (Over complication for the sake of confusion is one of the worst things a writer can do. It's good to see one who has not fallen prey to that.) The best part was a good explanation for something that seems so trivial and unimportant.

The difference between direct and indirect control, while simultaneously showing us how direct control works in action. Its clear that indirect control works for simple things such as beating up thugs, but direct control is much simpler and preferred in most cases.

Well, I see our seer is a female (or at least female by our standards). I shall read more!

It's too bad I don';t know who "I" is, other than a nofra seer who is dissatisfied with his or her job. (Is it a he or a she? Do nofra's even have genders? Well, I hope that'll be explained in the future.)

Holly is such a drama queen. But let's be honest. Doesn't everyone act like that. See it through the eyes of a seer and you begin to realize who pointless such complaints really are. Also see it through the eyes of the seer and you begin to see the pointlessness of the languages in the world. (You could even pick apart the inconsistencies within a particular langauage as well, but that's something I would do.)

I'm enjoying seeing the relationship between Holly and Tameryn develop. They seem to bounce off each other really well.
The ability to transform was an intersting twist as well.
Sorry it's been so long, but definatley looking forward to reading the rest of this.

**Does a little dance** I'll give you a REAL review on the next chapter... okay? Right now I just want to keep reading. (it's addicting!)

Yay! You finally added! I have to do the same... chapter 5 has been lingering for long enough! O well. I liked this chapter. Keep it up!

I feel sorry for Holly. Tameryn can be quite blunt, but she is right. Nice work. Keep writing!

~Twilight Starr~

Wow. This is really different, and better than I was expecting! I only say that because when I started it, I wasn't feeling the whole two-person perspective thing, but you pull it off very well! You have to have some skills to do that, I think. You also get major points for making me laugh. This story is also very original, and interesting, so I'm glad I started it. I'll definitly going to continue reading it!

[Am I just some crazy voice in her head, or an all-knowing deity?] Ah, I love Tameryn. Or is she still Tameryn?

I have a question. You had mentioned in chapter five or six (I can't remember which) that Riley had brown eyes. It was when Holly met him for the first time without being "occupied" by Tameryn. Was this on purpose or just a slip up? I'm considering that it was the former since you mentioned the importance about the eyes. Well, anywho, lovely chapter and update soon. =)

You don't like hearts and flowers? Man. Lol, I like your choice of using a rope and darkness to represent your nofra's life. I have to say that I'm enjoyed how you seamlessly inserted background information about Tameryn (can she still be called that? I rather like that name). Usually, I get all annoyed when I see all this glaring information about characters at the very beginning and then nothing of importance throughout the rest of the story. Another subtle, amazing part of your story.