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| FaireStruck 2008-05-16 ch 4,  | abuseI like it so far, defiantly update soon. (Now I'm reviewing yours after you reviewed mine!) Sorry, I thought that was sort of hilarious. I can't wait for your next update. |
| Night's Fantacy 2008-04-22 ch 3, | abuseYeah, this is a lot better. It's also good that the heroine isn't just falling into his arms. I think them stumbling together is better than Kea interfering to get then together. |
| Night's Fantacy 2008-04-21 ch 2, | abuseOkay, I really liked the intro. But this is almost an exact copy of One NIght with the King. I wouldn't care if it was just similar, or if you got the idea from it. But the only difference is that the king is scarred and the girl is blind. It's practically a carbon copy. You can keep the basic idea, but change it enough that it doesn't just read like a copy of One Night with the King. I'd say start changing things right after Kea brings Jayne to her room. |