i loved it! i loved the whole idea. wonderful

ps. i think that gunfire is one word

Oh, how very dark.

Luff it.

-Oreo

I wonder what THIS is about xD Give it to Vince tomorrow, I dare you, haha.

Maybe it's just because I know the situation or something (or at least I think I do...) but I really liked this. The idea of words being "murder" is brilliant--though so, so cruel, as well, but it really WORKS. And man, that ending, those last four stanzas. I kind of a little shudder after reading those, Falcy-Walcy.

-Shadow (yes, I like stormy weather...can you guess what I'm listening to right now? lol)

I love this! I like the way you've captured the sort of stream of consiousness feel writing can get sometimes--the way you just sort of write without any sort of plan. I especially like the repetition of "pre-meditated murder"--I really like that concept.

If it weren't for the comma in ''Of syllables, of nouns'' that would've made it confusing. But non the less, it was an excellent line. I just love the beginning of this piece. Keep it Up!