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| kisses-and-gasoline 2008-04-22 ch 1,  | abuseI love the idea of the 'berry sky'! and I think you express the idea of conformity really well in the last 3 lines I'm not sure about the later half of the first verse... it seems like you're talking about something else, I'm not sure what... but the imagery is brilliant, as usual! |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-04-22 ch 1, | abuseit has a pleasant flow and is very descriptive. |