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| Faith Adeline 2008-06-26 ch 11, | abuseI think this was a good story, but moved much too fast. I would edit it, and add a lot more. Pace yourself, take your time. Then, it would be great. Faith |
| Heart-of-Black-Ice 2008-06-23 ch 11, | abuseWOW That was amazing I love the whole un-hollywood vampires it's really good to have some individuality now. I also liked the whole womens murder club going on in the vets it gave it a really big twist. I'm now going to read as many of your stories as I can cause I absolutely adore your writing style. Keep at it. |
| Immortal dragon 2008-05-16 ch 11, | abuseThat turned out to be really good. The ending was a little weird, but that added to how interesting it was. Good job. |
| xxchar16xx 2008-05-04 ch 11, | abuseI loved it! This was such a great story I don't even know where to begin . . . I suppose the coolest/strangest thing for me is that I work in a vet clinic (I clean) and it seemed very realistic . . . I mean the layout of the clinic, not that I think my co-workers are selling drugs illegally or anything. That kind of struck me though (the fact that there was a clinic) I thought that was an interesting idea . . . I like your ideas of slayers or executioner I believed you called them it seems you keep the same idea from your stories I haven't gotten to the one about October yet, but the first chapter of The Beast Within seemed to have the same concept. That's also a good idea/plan to keep characters or concepts similar in your stories. Overall, you are a great writer and I love your work Keep writing! |