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| Twilight Starr 2008-07-03 ch 1,  | abuseInteresting beginning (interesting in a good way). The title makes me laugh. Nice work. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Undrahas 2008-05-09 ch 4, | abuseAll to obvious that romance is in the air. Very good. Keep it up. |
| Vampire0175 2008-05-07 ch 4, | abuseAwesome chapter. Cant wait for you to update. -Raven |
| Bazooka Joy 2008-04-29 ch 3, | abuseInteresting chapter. I noticed a few punctuation errors though. And “No silly, I’m a werewolf remember? (how could I forget) I’ve got a big appetite.." That might be better written as: "No silly, I'm a werewolf remember?" (and maybe in italics write How could I forget?) "I've got a big apetite..." Since what's in parentheses isn't a part of what he said, it's what she's thinking...right? “Sigh **, how about breakfast then." Is she sighing or...did you just intend for her to say that? That just confused me. |
| Undrahas 2008-04-28 ch 3, | abuseYeah that ain't gonna lat. She'll get caught. |
| pinkdottedlily 2008-04-28 ch 3, | abuseWow, I wonder what's going to happen...update soon! |
| molotovcocktailontherocks 2008-04-28 ch 3, | abusePretty good story overall, love the plot, kind of jumps into it a little fast, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. |
| Undrahas 2008-04-28 ch 2, | abuseHoly crap! YOu have to make it dramatic, and "make conflict start to form" early on don't you? Oh well. Good chapter. Keep it up. |
| Sayae 2008-04-27 ch 2, | abuseHm...interesting. Curious to see what it will lead too. |
| Bazooka Joy 2008-04-27 ch 2, | abuseOh snap, we have the same name...sh. Calvin is weird. He likes to her say her name a little bit too much. |
| Scriva Bella Noche 2008-04-27 ch 2, | abuseI like it so far. I have one slight criticism, though. At the very end of chapter 2, after Rose falls asleep, it comes across as very odd that she's still telling the story like she was completely concious, even what Calvin says. Perhaps you could change the point of view? Just a though =] ~S. Bella Noche |
| pinkdottedlily 2008-04-27 ch 2, | abusewell well well. I can't wait to see what happens! So update sooner than u did b4 please! Thanks |
| Love In A Moonbeam 2008-04-27 ch 2, | abuseo...very good! this book reminds me of twilight :D thats a great style of writing if you ask me! great job! |
| pinkdottedlily 2008-04-23 ch 1, | abuseAwesome beginning--even if it is a bit short. I can't wait to read more so update soon. Thanks! |
| Bazooka Joy 2008-04-22 ch 1, | abuseWerewolf romance...this shall be interesting. Judging by what I've read so far she won't mind being his servant. |