The banter is all so witty it makes me feel incompetent in a good way. Sweet ending! (Not sweet as in awesome, but sweet as in sweet. I mean, it was awesome, too, but when sweet means awesome I always imagine some annoying surfer-dude voice, and I can't stand those. . . .)

That was QUITE amazing. It's like a minimalist style, mostly conversation, and even then, you got the point across so perfectly! And the dialogue is so gosh darn witty. :) The plot was perfect...no fluff, yet all entertainment.

o i really quite adore this. i was hoping the whole story that somehow these two would end up together, since it seemed so obvious they were well matched. lali was charming and wonderful, and kaushal was endearingly attached to lali in his own round about way. i will admit that i do kind of wish there had been a bit more, after they finally got together, or perhaps a bit of lali's thoughts, especially just before and after. i can't help bt wonder a bit about how he viewed kaushal, beyond his obvious fondness. despite these minor desires of mine, i quite enjoyed the story. very cute and fun. :)

Aha! I liked this, very cute story!! :) I hope you use Lali and Kaushal in the future, they make an adorable couple :3

So glad to see another piece from you! I love your sense of humor, and your sense of eroticism doesn't hurt ;) The dash of mystery thrown in was a good choice. I only wish that part had been more developed. Almost all of the information we got about Rabbit was hinted rather than shown, and I'm not sure if that was deliberate, but I would have liked more, personally. I liked the story a lot.

That was a delightful read!

'Possession is nine tenths of the law' indeed. I'm still snickering over that.

Constructive critisim: sometimes it's a bit tricky to follow who's saying waht in your dialogue. It's not impossible, nor is it the worst I've seen, but sometimes I'd loose track of who was saying what and have to count back lines...ah, basically, maybe you could try to put a 'so-and-so said' in now and again. Just something minor that you might want to think about.

Overall your story was fantastic, and I really enjoyed reading it. You're actually one of the first authors I ever read on FP, and every so often I worry that you've left for good, so it's nice to see that you're writing again/still, and I hope to see more of these two in the future.

You're amazing,
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I loved it! I have to say, I'm glad things happened the way they did, it was a lovely story and I'm so happy you shared it with us. I'm going to tell all to go and read it.

Ah, so far this story is great, I love it! Poor kitty though, I hope she makes it. Can't wait for the next chapter, I know it's going to be great!

I really like this, and hope that this isn't the last chapter. I know you said it was finished and you were going to post chapter by chapter, so I'm hoping more is coming. I find it complete intruging to say the least. It's very humorious and I love the plot line so far. It's great!!

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Ah, it's nice to see you posting again. I've only have time this morning to read the first chapter of this new story. I have to say, it's wonderful so far, kind of sad, a bit humorius. I will jump on the others as soon as I'm back from work!

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