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| This Modern Love 2008-04-23 ch 1,  | abusein the first half of the poem, the imagery is so pure, but the second half sort of fell off and it seems like you got lax with the imagery. i dunno. |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-04-23 ch 1, | abuseit's very pretty and descriptive. I love the line "In the summer, where dreams collide". |
| perpetual questions 2008-04-23 ch 1, | abuse'sifting through racks in my mind' --not sure, but was this supposed to be 'cracks'? i love the anthropomorphisation in the last two lines. -adrian. |