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Beautiful. Insane. Perfect. 2008-07-18 ch 4,	abuseHaha your description of an Aussie guy is very generalised... But the attitude... Most gays around here are pretty darn nice lol. But eh. I only know about a hundred gays lol. And as an Aussie, I'm thoroughly offended about what you said about our accent pokes tongue out :P Yes, I'm childish. Anywho. I liked this. Continue,yes? x
Michael Jackson 2008-07-13 ch 4, anon.	abusehehehe. This is so funny!! I love it!! Lani's parents are hilarious! And I love how Lani just randomly bursts into song when he's nervous xD ‘It’s really nothing to be embarrassed about son, these things are a part of growing up, and even I still get them from time to time. I’m sure Luke here does-‘-- xD! I love Lani's dad. Update soon or I will ravish you. pours Jesus juice
billyboi 2008-07-13 ch 4, anon.	abuseI fink u need 2 hav shorter chapers.
James Hiwatari 2008-07-12 ch 4,	abusePoor guy, he won't get things unless they are spelled out in front of him. I don't think Luke needs to be more straightforward, but well... Poor guy. Review is a little late. I started reading that thing in someone else's computer and I didn't want to spend time reviewing or I wouldn't be able to read at all, so... Anyway, I like the style and the humor in the story. Sometimes it gets so ridiculous it is hard not to laugh. XD
MisterScotty 2008-07-11 ch 3,	abuseLani is still clueless. Heh, it's kind of funny and frustrating at the same time. I told i fail at reviews, i'm sorry.
MisterScotty 2008-07-11 ch 2,	abuseYour chapters are really long. I envy you. I fail at long chapters. lol. I suck at reviews so mines will always be lame whereas yours are awesome.
MisterScotty 2008-07-11 ch 1,	abuseThis story is clearly written in your eccentric style. It screams you every sentence. lol. And cliff hanger. Oh. Well not really cause the next chapter is there, but you know.
I 2008-07-04 ch 3, anon.	abuseits beter now its edited.
emmielou 2008-07-04 ch 3,	abuseUpdate soon or I will pinch you so hard your skin will be permanently ridged and you will look like a stegosaurus. Loving it so far babs.
Rainbowelectric 2008-07-04 ch 3,	abuseAw,...sigh...another dose of Lani and Luke. I do so love them. granted they're not exactly having the best of times at the moment, but all in due time, I'm hoping. I love Lani's narration. it's grown on me since the first chapter, his introspection, his every thought blatant and obvious to the reader. I was waiting for Luke to explain what Lani saw in the previous chapter since that's what he'd been saying as Lani ran back to the car. And then to find out that he's dating Shane...what the hell...gr I wish Lani wasn't so afraid to tell Luke that he liked him, that he wanted to be the first to kiss him. But the heart, especially one suddenly broken tends to build its walls more quickly than to take them down. I loved the dream sequence, showing their true need for each other, albeit an unspoken and denied need. The only thing that I have to point out is the sequence where Lani is about to toss one off and he's on the floor and you describe his trousers as being tight "oddly much tighter than I ever remembered..." but then two paragraphs later, the phone slips "...vibrated it's way into my trousers (they were rather loose you see)" the pebl being able to fit into Luke's mouth just left phallic ideas in my head, I'm surprised Lani didn't say something along those lines. Poor Luke is getting all these mixed signals. First Lani's bending over and giving him a show then he's jumping into bed and completely ignoring Luke. Ah! It's a bit mind numbing. Because we (and when I say we I mean me) want them to get together already. They clearly both want each other. Good thing we have more chapters to go to see how this story ends. :) Muchas smooches. Love it of course.
emmielou 2008-07-04 ch 2,	abuseOh...em...ge Imma kill Shane, mmk? Fucking swine. And I love how you make me out to be such a sadistic pervert. You've captured my essence superbly :) Imma keep reading now.
emmielou 2008-07-04 ch 1,	abuseLuke is such a dirty biatch. LOVE IT.
Mr. Man 2008-07-04 ch 3, anon.	abuseFP was being a bitch and said "only one review per chapter" blah, blah, BLAH!! There were so many things that Lani said that made me giggle so much! It doesn't seem like Lani's character has changed at all! So yay! Of course, I remembered that priest thing, and it's still hilarious!! I'm still pissed that Luke is going out with Shane! AND OMG! I don't remember Shane tripping Lani! How DARE YOU leave it a cliffie! I want to see Lani bitch him out xD You better update soon! Or else!!
kanari kireteru doll 2008-07-03 ch 3,	abuseO.O Lani! I'd've kicked Shane's blooming arse after that LOVELY little display... freaking Aussie bugger! I've got to say, one thing that I do ADORE about this story is the slang that you use, I actually know it! (I'm originally from England, still can't drop the accent after like, three years of being in the States?) Anyway, this chapter was a tad confusing, but I think that it was just part of Lani -I love his name btw- 's personality and frustration. Can't wait for more. hugs & kisses (I almost wrote, hugs and kids...) arielle
Famirka 2008-07-03 ch 3,	abuseThe phone thing was funny the first time but it was even funnier the second time :)

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