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| Kyllex of Darkness 2008-09-24 ch 4, | abuseHa! That was a good chapter. Can't wait for more! Sorry for the lame review. xD Update soon! |
| McShortShort 2008-09-21 ch 4, | abuseYay an update! haha i thought this day would never arrive!j/k but anyway good chapter i'm just wondering when we're actually gonna hear this stalkeer dude talk im wonderin what he has to say |
| The Key of Destiny 2008-09-20 ch 4, | abuseHaha, I find it humorous and interesting XDD I'll be looking forward to read more |
| hija de jesucristo 2008-09-20 ch 4, | abusethis is crazy but really good so far i guess it's a good crazy so yeah write more soon please? |
| McShortShort 2008-08-17 ch 3, | abuseso is the invisible guy a demon?? or a ghost?? gahh you gotta update i really like this story |
| McShortShort 2008-08-17 ch 2, | abusehaha i love the jokes |
| McShortShort 2008-08-17 ch 1, | abusewow wow wow this story seems very intresting plants that listen to your problems, invisible best friends that are death gods?? and the main character is a ghost? wow |
| Kyllex of Darkness 2008-07-01 ch 3, | abuseOh man I love Brian haha, he's funny. This was a great chapter, now Stalker Man is seriously freaky. He went poof! That's not normal!! xDD M yeah great job can't wait for the next chapter!! :D |
| Kyllex of Darkness 2008-07-01 ch 2, | abuseOoh, this is actually really interesting! Wow. I feel really bad for the main character. (Rachel, was it?) Okay, Crazy-but-still-cute Gay Guy is kinda starting to creep me out. Stalker, much? Oh wait - *reads name of story again* DUHDUR. Anyway, nicely done, can't wait to read more!! :D |
| its.Nothing.Special 2008-06-27 ch 3, | abuseYOU ARE SO . . . AMAZING. Dx [Brian waved at one of them, another one of those “flirty” smiles on his lips, and the girl actually sent a triumphant smirk my way. So a girl with an I.Q. in the negatives thinks she’s one-upped me by stealing the attention of a man whom, since I consider him a brother, I don’t want flirting with me anyway.] Rachel is so - HAHA! Seriously. Her sense of humor reminds me of my friend. I wish this kid was real! And . . . OMG I’D QUOTE THE WHOLE DARN BRIAN SCENE, but that might be pretty annoying since you wrote it yourself and probably already know what it says. Maybe you have it memorized. If I’d written something that brilliant, I’d totally be able to recite it right now. Aww, Brian! You know, sometimes little sub-plots annoy me (dude, a lot of things annoy me. I’m sorry) but when it’s one so OVERWHELMINGLY CUTE as Brian and Anne Marie . . . yeah. I’m all for it. I’ll probably start a club at school and we’ll have rallies and fundraisers and everything. It’ll be called BAM! Bryan and Anne Marie! BAM! BAM! BAM! Right. Sorry. He IS creepy. That is so awesome. Looks like Rachel already has her own stack of problems and she seemed a little touchy here. I liked seeing this side of her. And she TALKED TO HIM! AHH! That was exciting. Not what I'd expected by any means, but exciting nonetheless. I like how you handled that. Ohnoes, my show's on. WHEN I GET BACK, I EXPECT AN UPDATE. LOL. No, but seriously. ;)becky |
| its.Nothing.Special 2008-06-27 ch 2, | abuseKAYBACK. Ugh, I hate having to log back in and type those two words to prove I'm human. OF COURSE I AM. And they shouldn't discriminate against aliens or whatever, because if Clark Kent saw that, he'd totally cry. Anyways. HAVE I TOLD YOU how much I love your main character's voice?! It is so wonderfully relatable. And hilarious. I completely envy you. QUOTATIONTIMEE: [Oy.] HAHAHHAHAHHAHHEHEHE-ahem. Sorry. I just love that for some reason. [And since I live in Southern California, I don’t actually own an umbrella.] Yeah, I'm from So-Cal too, and I'm not sure I own one either. I just steal my mom's. BWAHA :D [Well, it was dramatic to me, anyway. Why should I care if my stupid roommate had already gone back to her own room by the time I actually left? Details, details…] LOOLL! She's awesome. 'Nuff said. [The day I turned five, my uncle Bill decided I was old enough to know what liquor tasted like.] I SWEAR I choked on my spit when I read that. LOL! That was just classic. [Yep. And the best part? I wasn’t even holding the plunger when they arrested me. They thought I’d handed it off to an accomplice already.] And when I read that, I was all OMG WHEN WILL SHE STOP! Because seriously, I was laughing so hard and hoping quite insanely that the funniness would end so I could catch my breath. So . . . yeah. Ingenious chapter. MORE BLONDIE PLEASE. ;)becky |
| its.Nothing.Special 2008-06-27 ch 1, | abuseOMG. OHEMGEE! Why I never checked out your work, I honestly have no idea. But that was one of the funniest, most original, confusing, and therefore enticing prologues I've ever read. I love how you threw in little descriptions of how she looked like throughout the chapter because . . . IT WASN'T ANNOYING. WEEWWT! [“Oh, fine,” she huffed, letting her slender body slouch down in her own hideously orange and hideously plastic chair. “Don’t tell me. I don’t care anyway.” It wasn’t true, of course, but the fern didn’t need to know that.] ROFLOLAHHA! She is so crazy, I can't help but feel charmed by her. I love the potted plant, too, because I was quivering while listening to her as well. MORE! ;)becky |
| iloveshinythings 2008-06-05 ch 3, anon. | abuseReally funny. Especially loved the jokes at the end and how crazy Rachel is. Your great. |
| Sassy-Chan 2008-06-05 ch 3, anon. | abuseCongratulations on your tests! And you were worried about them. As you would say: Pfft. [Nothing more happened until I was already in my favorite seat in my least favorite class, waiting for the idiot professor to show up so we could start the snooze-fest.] This sentence really made me laugh for some reason. Maybe it's just that you found a really funny way of saying what we're all thinking when we go to school. Very amusing. [“I bite,” I informed my attacker, my voice as cold as I could make it. And really, I do. My assailant only laughed. “I know,” Brian confessed, sounding as though he meant it. Which he should, because I really do.] Very funny. You have such a dry sense of humor, and it always makes me giggle. I like you. [Mostly because I couldn’t reach him without leaving my seat, and I didn’t feel like wasting the energy.] I like how lazy she is. Usually when you've got someone this sarcastic, they're really energetic too. Somehow it amuses me that your character isn't. She's like a cat that bites, and it's great. [Eh. I’ll just put Ex-Lax in his food the next chance I get. That’ll be revenge enough. Then again, Brian won’t eat anything I give him anymore. Too many Plots of Vengeance in the past, I guess. At least Anne Marie still trusts me. Most of the time. Sort of. Okay, not really. My best friends suck.] That last line was especially great. I like how your mind works. [they immediately started blushing and squealing like piglets.] Nice imagery. I want to know about the diaper incident! [“No, but I’ve been peed on by a dog and assaulted by a paint can, and I think I’ve picked up a stalker.”] Haha. [So a girl with an I.Q. in the negatives thinks she’s one-upped me by stealing the attention of a man whom, since I consider him a brother, I don’t want flirting with me anyway. Yep…dagger right to the heart, I tell you.] Haha again. [“And then the fluffy penguin announced that he was gay and tried to bite me,] Very funny again. I can see you saying that actually, so it's easy to picture one of your characters spouting something like this with a completely deadpan expression. [“And after we have taught them to speak with bad Spanish accents and run around with amusing giants, we’ll all go hunt the six-fingered men together.”] Hahahaha! I loved that movie. So Brian and Anne Marie are in love? Can't wait for their story! You ARE going to hook them up, right? [I almost smiled, then decided it’d only be fair to keep torturing him. Because that’s what I do.] You're so funny and evil. [Oh, Great Flying Monkeys…I actually do have a stalker!] You always have the most random phrases. It's part of the reason why I like you so much. I'm guessing that the cute gay guy is the death god from the prologue? It's the only way he could have poofed as you so amusingly put it. Is he there to kill her? The summary says she only has six months to live, so I'm really curious. [I like to think that I’m creative, not stupid.] Love the sarcasm. She called him a butt-munch? Haha. I haven't used that phrase since elementary school. Your so funny. [You don’t usually get all crazy on us unless you’re stressed, so what’s happened?”] Just how crazy is she? You're always calling everybody crazy, but I'm starting to think you mean it in a more literal sense with Rachel. Is she really nuts? Her parents haven't called her in six months? That's not normal. Are they just really bad parents or is something going on with them? [He opened his mouth to speak, but before he could say anything, I shook my head. “Whatever it is,” I told him, my voice too tired to be as harsh as it probably would have been at any other time, “keep it to yourself. I don’t want to know.”] That was an unexpected reaction. I was waiting for her to scream or start demanding his name or something, but she just walked away. This is why I like you. You're unpredictable. You can take any situation and make it fresh. I'd get drunk, too. Great chappie! Very funny and I can't wait for you to reveal more of the plot. |
| elisefey 2008-05-13 ch 2, | abuseFunny thing about the catastrophic birthdays because it is a well-known fact amongst those close to me that my birthday is cursed and you don't want to be anywhere near me when that date rolls around... In fact, a comparison chart: tenth and eleventh b-days there was a sizeable earthquake necessitating the day be spent in a doorway, twelve was when my great uncle died (who was also the pastor of my church), other years I've had my head split open requiring 18 stitches and... uh, this is totally irrelevant so I'll shut up now. Except that I have a similarly irrational theory about deliberately expecting the day to be bad so that I am pleasantly surprised when things aren't actually worse. In other words, I find your character unsettlingly relatable. Really. Unsettling. In a hilariously awesome kind of way. Anyway, considering promise inherent in the prologue of more randomness to come, I'm definitely interested in learning more about the blond guy in pajamas. |