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| Tranquil Thorns 2008-04-24 ch 1,  | abuseCute. =P I was reminded of Shel Silverstein. In line 'They broke the door in a rage', I would suggest that another syllable be added to make it flow better. Maybe 'They broke the door in a mad rage'? Anywho, good work. (: |