Nice chapter, kind of see what you mean about Ian being a bit annoying but I haven't seen enough of him to really say anything more. I'm also a bit confused about the whole hike, were they gone for a week? Otherwise great work ^^

Real nice story, don't know why I haven't seen it before but anyhoo quite the pessimistic character you have there but that doesn't mean I don't like her. Think I have a new song to check up also ^^

Then just to point a few things out-not to be rude or anything-I just think you should avoid writing "F-ck" as much as possible as it's really unprofessional and kind of annoying to see in stories most of the time. I'm not saying you shouldn't use it if you want to but well I just guess my English teacher have rubbed of on me on this particular matter. Also try to lay low with the parenthesis's and use commas or "-" instead as it is more correct.

Shit, I really do sound like a bitch there but just felt like I had to say something. Anyhow your plot is great as far as I've red this far and I think I'll try reading the second chapter soon because I really want to know some more about Ian and everything ^^