I really love the imagery in this, and the extended "hip" metaphor. Really lovely work. My favorite stanza has to be the second to last. :)

I'm not sure the idea of flames, fire, and burning was the best choice, just because it leads to pretty typical description - but there was very little of that, and you can always backtrack.

Great work. I look forward to reading more.

Jules

the way you describe things is fantastic!
you really know what you're talking about.
i like the stanza beginning with 'i matured in flames...'


(and thanks for the review and favourite

really superb work here. i would like to have written about "quicksand silence"; but I think clearly the best bit, after your set-up, is: "my hips do not belong to children, mama,/but to kings."

Whoah.

i love it, really, i could say much but its all nothing, excellent imagery and really pulls the reader in

Very, very lovely. I really enjoyed this; the second to last very especially stood out to me. The imagery is wonderful.

i adore this, and the hipswinging seductive pride of it: such a rich feminine quality.

I love the poetic language used in this story. The consistency of the themes of fire and burning shine through [if only "blaze" were the operative word] within every line. This is also a very metaphorical poem [I think; I hope]. I love it.

I love the narrative feel of this. it seems to go a lot of places, but you always pull it back together, so it ends up feeling solid. the second-to-last stanza is my personal favorite. great poem, I really enjoy your writing style!

Ah, F-ing perfect.

I love the way you told an entire life story, a whole ideal, in a poem.

and best of all, it's good. Infact, it's really good.

I especially like the way you played with the sensuality of it all, and yet never became tacky. Awesome.

Friggin awesome.

i'm not usually one to read a long poem, but this one captivated me from the very beginning.

nice job! i love the imagery!

yours until the wind changes,
gg