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| Moon's Poetess 2008-05-03 ch 1,  | abuseAs you say in your profile, very blunt and to the point =) That's perfectly fine, means there's also not much to say to this otherwise. I like the last line though. Adds a nice little spice of interest to an otherwise bland-ish poem. Like adding honey to porridge ^^ Porridge is good in itself, but still... honey... Moon's Poetess |
| Nemonus 2008-04-25 ch 1, | abuseI'm a tad confused--if old friends are calling, why does the narrator still feel invisible and forgotten? I feel that there is an answer hidden in the line "Now that I'm trying to let go", but not enough specifics have been given for it to be understood. This is a pretty mediocre poem, in terms of word choice and rhythm. The metaphor-ish "exit stage right" in the last line could be much more effective if the comparison to theatre were used throughout the poem. Decent work. |
| Luna October Wolf 2008-04-25 ch 1, | abuseThis is a really good poem. I like it. |