Great job at description. The last line is haunting. Nice work. Keep writing!

Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer.

Twilight Starr

I like that one, very much. Nice touch, I see what you mean by how you can't add anymore without ruining it. I think it is fine the way it is.

Hope I can see more short stories, or maybe more in the future!