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| fairytale failure 2008-05-10 ch 1,  | abuseI think you rhyme scheme worked really well in this poem. I especially liked the beginning, where you extended the simile 'your look is like a razor'. I also loved the end of the poem, and how you incorporated 'the end' into part of the poem. However, I think it would be much easier for the reader to understand which lines belong together if you formatted this into stanzas. |