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| miscellanea 2008-07-01 ch 1,  | abuseThat was fabulous. A lot of times the repetition of one line really can get boring and lose meaning. Oh the other hand, I think you did a very good job making the same line mean something new in each context. What an amazing concept as well. ~Miscellanea |
| hateandkill-D 2008-06-30 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is simply amazing! i love it!! great job! |
| SweetxDisaster87 2008-06-21 ch 1, | abusethis is rly good. great job. & anyone can relate to this and all.. |
| Aesthetix 2008-06-03 ch 1, | abuseThat. Was beautiful. |
| Lizziegolightly 2008-05-28 ch 1, | abuseLove this poem. So good, espcially the progression from "real as paper flowers," to "reality takes its toll." I cannot belive it was your first thing on here, I'll have to read the rest of your work! Also, your username is quite awesome. |
| Starfire17 2008-05-27 ch 1, | abuseWow I absolutely love this poem. The similie is an excellent one and your descriptions just further flesh it out to make it completely wonderful. \ I hope that you write more poems like this one. |
| addicted2storiz 2008-05-10 ch 1, | abuseForget me, YOU are amazing at this poetry! Honestly, paper flowers? who would have thought of that? The farthest I've gotten is Raggedy Ann and plastic dolls (not posted ... or finished). I figure that I give such so *few* (I used to review like crazy but now I'm just lazy until something really strikes me) that they might as well be worth something. I'm honored/flattered though. This of course is wonderful and no I'm not just paying you compliments for kicks and giggles. Really did love the metaphor (wow this is sad, I just took a bunch of exams and I was about to go on about extended metaphors and symbolism and oh wow sorry). I think the last line really did make an impact. How do you manage to rhyme and describe so well? Honestly, I'm in awe. Thanks again! Oh and if by chance you do reply, and I don't, it's only because I really ought to be actually studying for my finals (haven't done that yet :D) |
| SuperwomanForever 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abuseI love the line 'You're as real as paper flowers'. I like that fact that it is a simile and a paradox. |
| Goldenorientalelephant 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abusewow, amazing |
| Princess-anna57 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseThere are great lines in this piece. Good work choice. Write on! ~Anna~ ^_^ |
| controlledinsanity 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseI absolutely LOVE this. "You’re as real as paper flowers Vivid colors, empty soul Vacant smiles and broken dreams Reality takes its toll" Yes. That ending was just wow. Very well written and it flows like water and oh my gosh! it makes sense too! You've got some talent(: Keep at it :D -Airi |
| dreamsarepoetry 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseI like this. I think my favorite lines were, "A mask, a porcelain face / Painted smiles and hollow eyes / Your lies fall into place. / You’re as real as paper flowers" It's great imagery and flows well, and gets the point of falseness across very well. By the way, thanks for reviewing my poem. :) |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseI love how you use the analogy of paper flowers. Because paper flowers are real and tangible. They last but they aren't flowers! |