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| no.peace.los.angeles 2008-05-02 ch 1, | I love how the end circles back to the beginning. Circular poems are lovely. That first stanza is probably my favorite; I love the phrase "tearstream darkness." That is just gorgeous. I also like the contrast between the darkness of a drug addict's life and the bright sunshine of a 99 degree day. Wonderful. Keep writing! :) |
| Aquafied 2008-04-28 ch 1, | it's not the 14th but i swear to god it was 99 in anaheim yesterday perhaps we are just a few weeks in advance i just missed 11.11 for this review i wear long sleeves in hot weather dream of winter in summer cool weather and hot weather i'll never compromise |
| Leylique Morrow 2008-04-26 ch 1, | Exceptionally moving. Perfect blend of vivid and vague, concrete and abstract. You misspelled "bleak." I continue to envy your perspicacity and your ability to express it so fluidly. |