Reviews for The Fallen One - FictionPress.com

Le Pecore Nere 2008-05-08 ch 5,	abuseIt's very good so far, and I'd be mad too >:( if that were me... I think you should put more description in it, you know... but other than that the plot is very well thought of :) b^-^d UPDATE SOON!! ~->LPN
Le Pecore Nere 2008-05-02 ch 4,	abuseI hope he gets to stay on... unless of course the God's are like "no!" then it'd be interesting to see how he'd escape XD Anyway, it's a really good update. Nice story so far, UPDATE SOON!! ~->LPN
Le Pecore Nere 2008-04-29 ch 3,	abuseIt's great so far! Although there are some grammar/ spelling errors "here" instead of "hear" but that's alright. Other than that nothing that wouldn't be noticed unless it was looked for. I hpe that things turn out alright! And this Retrain fellow sound like quite a dictator. UPDATE SOON!! ~->LPN
Le Pecore Nere 2008-04-28 ch 2,	abuseanother good update b^-^d I gotta admit, after not writing for like... ages, you haven't lost your touch XD is this Seira chick the person Zerat falls in love with? Great so far, UPDATE SOON!! ~->LPN
Le Pecore Nere 2008-04-28 ch 1,	abusewow, it sounds intense so far! The names are a little hard to keep track of, but I'm sure things'll become clear later on in the chapters... I can't wait to see how these things turn out, UPDATE SOON!! ~->LPN