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CuriousContradiction 2009-08-29 . chapter 11
Beautiful.

These are really, truly stunning. You said that you saw a few good quotes in my story, but I read this and all of these haikus are quotable. You pack so much imagery and feeling in just a few words. It impressed me how well you could portray the feelings that each flower evokes. I feel like you also improved as time went on. In the beginning, you had a lot of wonderfully written phrases, and it was all descriptive and vivid and everything, but you'd list the phrases rather than link them. As the haikus went on, all the phrases just came together. You're an amazing haiku writer. You really are. :)
likes to headbang 2008-08-20 . chapter 3
in general, i liked all of ur haikus, but i liked this one the best. the bittersweet irony of the Fall from innocence. well done.
likes to headbang 2008-08-20 . chapter 1
very cynical. i like.
dragonflydreamer 2008-08-17 . chapter 11
The emphasis on "lingering" was very effective. Pardoning the lame put, it made it linger :p

The break from the second to third lines was awkward. The first thought was interrupted and there was less emphasis on the last word.

Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
dragonflydreamer 2008-08-17 . chapter 10
I like your refernce to the "loves me/loves me not" idea. You phrased it in an interesting way that didn't make it at all cliche.

I don't like how the phrase "one/by one" got split as it's such a self-contained idea. I know it's hard with the syllable count, though :/
dragonflydreamer 2008-08-17 . chapter 9
I like the use of the word "wilting." Even though it's used in reference to the light, it is commonly used for flowers, so it wort of tied the two ideas together.

Again, you left an adjective hanging in the first line. I suppose it's not too much of an issue as poems often excercise a lot of poetic liscence, but it still draws some negative attention to that line.
dragonflydreamer 2008-08-17 . chapter 8
I liked the phrase "colored by the/dye of first crushes." It beautiful and original imagery.

I don't like the commas in the second line. It breaks it up too much.
dragonflydreamer 2008-08-17 . chapter 7
I like the use of the words "gleaming" and "beaming" in such close context. It has a nice ring to it that carries the first line into the next.

The first line doesn't make sense grammaticly. Gleaming is an adjective, yet it is not describing any noun.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
fictionluvr 2008-06-08 . chapter 7
A friend just told me tonight that whenever she sees a sunflower she has to smile because they look like happiness to her.
fictionluvr 2008-06-08 . chapter 5
This describes perfectly what I think of when I think of daisies too.
fictionluvr 2008-06-08 . chapter 4
My sister's favorite.
miscellanea 2008-06-06 . chapter 8
oh these were so cute and nice to read! i thoroughly loved them - my favorite one was the tulips.
just dani 2008-05-29 . chapter 6
i so love these!
i'd read each one
and be amazed at how well you dscribed their character
and some of it i hadn't thought of before,
but then it made sense and seemed to go with
the flower perfectly.

very nice poems!! :]
BlackestOpal 2008-05-25 . chapter 6
These are beautiful.
I love all of them, but my favourite was the first one about Roses. They are cliché, but they still mean so much.
dragonflydreamer 2008-05-24 . chapter 6
Reviewing for the Review Marathon! (link in profile)

This one is very lovely. I loved all of the descriptions in this one. The alliteration in the beginning was amazing, too. It works particularly well at the beginning because it captures the reader's attention. I honestly can't think of any concrit for this one other than my earlier comment about punctuation, but you said it's not really your style so I won't push it. I love all the ones you've posted so far. Please update this soon!
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