| Reviews for Endless Showers of Petals |
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Peacockfreak 8/20/10 . chapter 3Heart wrenchingly beautiful |
Icyfire4w5 12/15/09 . chapter 1It's a cliche that roses represent love, blah, blah, blah. Nevertheless, it's a lovely cliche. |
CuriousContradiction 8/29/09 . chapter 11Beautiful. These are really, truly stunning. You said that you saw a few good quotes in my story, but I read this and all of these haikus are quotable. You pack so much imagery and feeling in just a few words. It impressed me how well you could portray the feelings that each flower evokes. I feel like you also improved as time went on. In the beginning, you had a lot of wonderfully written phrases, and it was all descriptive and vivid and everything, but you'd list the phrases rather than link them. As the haikus went on, all the phrases just came together. You're an amazing haiku writer. You really are. :) |
likes to headbang 8/20/08 . chapter 3in general, i liked all of ur haikus, but i liked this one the best. the bittersweet irony of the Fall from innocence. well done. |
likes to headbang 8/20/08 . chapter 1very cynical. i like. |
dragonflydreamer 8/17/08 . chapter 11The emphasis on "lingering" was very effective. Pardoning the lame put, it made it linger :p The break from the second to third lines was awkward. The first thought was interrupted and there was less emphasis on the last word. Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile) |
dragonflydreamer 8/17/08 . chapter 10I like your refernce to the "loves me/loves me not" idea. You phrased it in an interesting way that didn't make it at all cliche. I don't like how the phrase "one/by one" got split as it's such a self-contained idea. I know it's hard with the syllable count, though :/ |
dragonflydreamer 8/17/08 . chapter 9I like the use of the word "wilting." Even though it's used in reference to the light, it is commonly used for flowers, so it wort of tied the two ideas together. Again, you left an adjective hanging in the first line. I suppose it's not too much of an issue as poems often excercise a lot of poetic liscence, but it still draws some negative attention to that line. |
dragonflydreamer 8/17/08 . chapter 8I liked the phrase "colored by the/dye of first crushes." It beautiful and original imagery. I don't like the commas in the second line. It breaks it up too much. |
dragonflydreamer 8/17/08 . chapter 7I like the use of the words "gleaming" and "beaming" in such close context. It has a nice ring to it that carries the first line into the next. The first line doesn't make sense grammaticly. Gleaming is an adjective, yet it is not describing any noun. Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile) |
fictionluvr 6/8/08 . chapter 7A friend just told me tonight that whenever she sees a sunflower she has to smile because they look like happiness to her. |
fictionluvr 6/8/08 . chapter 5This describes perfectly what I think of when I think of daisies too. |
fictionluvr 6/8/08 . chapter 4My sister's favorite. |
miscellanea 6/6/08 . chapter 8oh these were so cute and nice to read! i thoroughly loved them - my favorite one was the tulips. |
just dani 5/29/08 . chapter 6i so love these! i'd read each one and be amazed at how well you dscribed their character and some of it i hadn't thought of before, but then it made sense and seemed to go with the flower perfectly. very nice poems! :] |