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| laureola-lunes 2008-07-16 ch 1,  | abuse...update... c'mon... character developement isn't worth tearing your hair out! ~lyl~ |
| Imouto-Neko-chan 2008-05-17 ch 1, | abusewow this is so amazing! i was drawn in and couldn't stop reading! you have a real tallent and if this was published i would buy it! you used great imagery and dramatic situations. i'm sure there are things that can be improved but i can't find anything that's bad. |
| Punksheep 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseI enjoyed it. the beginning wasnt so boring to turn me off, and while the chapter was a fast read...well..i enjoyed it and i find myself wanting more. You have a pretty good storyline, and so far i am drawn to the characters. The only spelling error i found was this: "The human was already at he end of the tunnel," you put 'he', yet i'm sure you mean 'the' ^^ thats all i noticed though. I really hope you continue this, its been awhile since i have actually read something i really enjoyed on fictionpress ^^ ill be watching for more. |