TT.TT It's over?! This final chapter is peaceful, in a dark, depressing kind of way. The detail is great too, and was worth however much time you put into it. I love the driveway gravel section, because I can really hear the tires.

Um, to give myself closure until you post the (epic!) re-write, I'm going to pretend the story ends in one of two ways. One: Summer stays captured and Autumn stays on the run, growing up to be the leader of a mutant rebellion movement. Two: Xeno helps Autumn escape and they all run off together. Regardless of how and when it ended, the story was awesome while it lasted. A moment of silence for our temporarily fallen comrade, Define Human. *bagpipes wail in background*

BATMAN! How could I have not guessed?! Oh, sorry. Continue the moment of silence. *bagpipes start up again*

FUUCK YOU. i hate you. c'mon! how do you cringe at that plot? MINE is something to actually cringe at. you ended with a f**king cliffhanger, with so much left unanswered, and this is the LAST CHAPTER! you suck

KATIE-KINS! what the hell is wrong with you?! how could you end a story like this? how could you? you suck kate!! there better be more to this story...or else. and don't you think I forgot about you owing me another chapter, cause I didn't forget! but this chapter doesn't count! I can't believe you just ended the story like this! and there's only 9 chapters too! you're a disgrace to writers all across America! ok, so I gotta admit you're still an awesome writer and that chapter, even though it's so short, was still sosososo good! but im still mad at you for stopping such an awesome story right in the middle! you suck katie-kins!! you never finish any of your millions I stories! and what do you mean this plot is bad? it's not!! it's so freaking good! you're delusional katie-kins! well we'll continue this discussion later, missy! I'm not finished with you, little girl! you better finish this story soon, or else!! xD

Interesting story. I love the premise and the genetically engineered sisters are imaginative characters. The antagonist being named Xeno made me bust a rib laughing, due to something I'm currently working on! Haha.

Anyway great work, looking forward to more updates!

Oh, what happens next?

KATE! now you MUST update this since I'm reading it now!
how could you separate the two??!! nyah! update soon or I'll steal all your fries too!

Its nice to see that the siblings care about each other, because otherwise it'd be extremely self destructive in those circumstances.

General comment: I keep picturing the narrator (Summer) as a guy. ^^;

A tip: cut down on the adverbs when you do your "she said" variations. They dont add much.

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"We were hybrids, part bat and part human."
...I am feeling slightly nauseous when imagining the bat and human intercourse... O_O I mean, WTF?

"I’d had cold"
- Unsure about this one, but I think you can cut out one "had" from there

"Almost as cold as the real world"
- Okay...a bit too emo sounding for me. Watch out for those remarks. :/

I am not so sure what world they live in, but it seems interesting. On who will they get their revenge on though, I wonder? The revenge aspect is the big part of me reading :p

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Interesting start so far. The opening of the chapter was particularly my favorite. It makes me wonder if it will have to do with government conspiracies, which are enjoyable mostly :)

Cant really say if I like or dislike the characters so far. Neither stand out at the moment.

Nice ending line btw. Added some feeling :)

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The plot has gotten me interested so far. I like how the characters feel very... human(was that why you named the story what you did?). It is not like you just have these characters that are genetic experiments and then we follow them on an adventure. You can tell that they have feelings and that what is going on is affecting them very realistically. I will definitely keep on reading. Keep it up!

Felt the need to /inject/ a little drama into the chapter? (du-dum-dum-tsh)

Puns aside, I think it's a reasonable move to split up Autumn and Summer, but then again, I've got no clue where the story's going so I can't exactly judge. I have to agree, Autumn and Xeno were a little too calm in this chapter. It's reasonable for Autumn to think about overpowering the kid, even if she doesn't try anything (it'd be stupid to mess with this kid, right?) So yus, there is my (un)sound advice!

Other than that, I think it's cool for the little sister to have to save the main character. Good twist. And I'm wondering who this Eric Tyson is... But the image of someone staring at a Jenga tower and then suddenly punching it down just made me laugh and laugh and laugh! Sparkly new title too, I like it!

Oh, and tomorrow, bring a waterproof hat. You cannot rush genius, but you /can/ keep your genius milk-free! :D

why the hell did autumn just leave like that?? she could have at least brought summer with her! or even stuck xeno with the needle or whatever. and she was too calm when he stuck her sister. I wouldve flipped out. lol but that's just me. anywayy good chapter. too short though. you better postthe next one soon or I'll back out of the next movie too. hah now, GO WRITE! =]

um okay, that was a weird chapter. first of all, shouldn't Autumn be a little more shocked and angry that a random stranger just knocked-out her sister?!? and y didn't Xeno just inject Autumn? does he want her to leave? yur confusing kate. but if u don't post the next chapter by tomorrow, i am spilling milk all over your head in lunch, and don't u DARE think i won't do it! so...WRITE! and it better be from Summer's pov. i wanna find out who her captors are!

Pretty cool story so far. I'd just suggest keeping the chapters longer and such, but still pretty sweet!

It was good. Very nice use characterization. Wonderul job.