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Amazingmutant 2008-08-21 ch 6,	abuseAhh. xD I love your stuff! You have a total talent for fics like these! Keep up the great work :D
clumsybella15 2008-08-20 ch 6,	abuseYou last updated a month ago! You'd better add another chapter soon... I like your story so far, it's good. You should describe their bat-half a little more. How they see, hear, taste, smell... It's bound to be different, considering they have bat DNA. Keep writing.
Needa S 2008-07-31 ch 2,	abuseInteresting story. A great start. Thanks for the kind review and write on.
Mockingbyrd's Tune 2008-07-21 ch 6,	abuseShort and perfect. You've kept the witty rambling and introduced the mysterious Xeno into their lives with finesse. You meant the nursery rhymes to be an analogy in a way, right? They are not really what they appear to be, like Summer, Autumn, and Xeno. Nice. "His skin tone was I-spent-my-life-in-a-closet pale" - hmm... he doesn't get out much; too busy feeding his RPG addiction? Xeno's thoughts lead me to trust him. Yet, I don't have a clue what he's up to. Kudos for that, too. Requesting an update soon. - M.T.
Rose Warne 2008-07-18 ch 6,	abuseYes! They meet! I loved it when Xeno just waved and said, "Humpty Dumpty." Best way to introduce yourself. Ever. And I'm glad Summer's not an idiot, because she'd lose favor if she didn't realize this suspicious character wasn’t completely honest. Speaking of which, I'm really curious about what Xeno's going to do to earn their trust... or what he's going to turn into... or what he's going to eat... Okay, just ignore me, I'm hypothesizing again. So good, good chapter. More soon please?
ShadowFlight73 2008-07-18 ch 6,	abuseooh suspense! lol. yay Kate you finally posted a chapter after two months that couldv'e taken you a few days to write at most! good job! anyways, good chapter, finally something is happening! post then next one soon (and by soon I mean less than a month)!
FairlyOddGirl 2008-07-17 ch 6,	abuseyay Kate!! u finally posted!! did my new posting inspire you?? haha. I wonder what Xeno will show Summer and Autumn... dun dun dun! post more soon (or else!)
Piratess-Bell 2008-06-26 ch 4,	abuseOh, wow, this is really good so far! There is such amazing voice in this. Summer is very good-humored, even in this terrible situation. I can't wait for the next chapter. -Piratess-Bell
Durak 2008-06-24 ch 5,	abuseMy apologies, but I don't feel like critical-analysis of five chapters of a story right now (however short), so please bear with my sweeping generalizations: Looks like you're a good writer. =) Summer and Autumn have great repertoire; the little idiosyncratic details you throw in make them likable and believable. Xeno seems... promising, but I would hate to see him end up as the stereotypical "stubborn kid", the angsty teen, whom against all real logic can defy adults with impunity. And while Summer and Autumn's personalities are really just burgeoning - at the moment, there's very little to understand about them - I'm still intrigued. There were some phrases and sentences in your story I think needed re-working, like this one: "/Don't cry/, I ordered silently. But since when did I take orders from strangers? Now, flying so far from home, I realized that I /had/ become exactly that: a stranger." I can feel the sense of her alienation, and her realization of being a "stranger"; but the way it happened seemed... well, forced. Why does she call herself a stranger like that? It doesn't seem natural, to me. The first and third sentence are both valid, but the way the middle sentence "connects" them is... well, I don't think it connects at all. The feelings are true, and believable, but I don't think it makes sense to display them that way. My two cents. My only real qualms are the... well, they certainly aren't plot holes, but they are a bother. For example, the idea Autumn and Summer can hide their wings beneath sweatshirts seems like a bit of a stretch; why two human/bat hybrids would eat inside McDonalds, instead of while on the move. Furthermore, for two uniquely genetic girls, the threat of death by government experimentation, deportation, and the thought of never once seeing their family again has yet to crop up. Can (ostensibly) teenaged girls really expect to save their family from the big bad government? And what IS the story with their family, anyway? The hopes of finding out more about their father - and whether there are more people like them (I felt that was implied in the "if you weren't human you weren't important" statement in Chapter 1.) What sort of universe is it that they live in? Will we find out? Well, I intend to keep reading. Keep it up. =)
ShadowFlight73 2008-06-21 ch 1, anon.	abuseHappy yesterday birthday!
Rose Warne 2008-06-20 ch 5,	abuseOh, mysterious new character! I can't wait to find out more about him and his preferably dastardly mission. And maybe how he got an awesome name like Xeno. I wonder what Xeno's bringing to the action party? (Hopefully he's bringing Snickerdoodles, since Summer sounds hungry!) The chapter was short, but something's better than nothing! I'm hoping you'll get another up /immediately/, but I'll settle for soon. Happy birthday, Maplewing!
ShadowFlight73 2008-06-20 ch 1,	abuseHAPPY BIRTHDAY KATE!HAPPY BIRTHDAY KATE!HAPPY BIRTHDAY KATE!HAPPY BIRTHDAY KATE! just to make it 100!
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FairlyOddGirl 2008-06-19 ch 4,	abuseHAPPY BIRTHDAY KATE! just wanted to write this here so that everyone who didnt already know it was ur birthday could say 'happy birthday maplewing' hint hint... anyway, have a happy happy happy happy birthday! talk to ya later today!! ps. today is June 20 (kate's birthday) - jaime
ShadowFlight73 2008-06-19 ch 5,	abusei completely and totally agree with Mockingbyrd's Tune. ACTION! also, i quote from a comment, "it felt like a continuation of the whole 'go here or go there?' saga" Kate... i already warned you that you can't stall for 10 chapters/pages until something actually happens, like in the locket story! It was an okay chapter, but the best part was the top about Xeno cus now we have another mysterious character (by the way, how old is he?) to wonder about. keep writing!

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