The loose rhyming and rhythm sets the pace, it's good. The last line is pretty powerful, it ties the poem together. The subject matter is trademark. I like it!

"The teardrop hits the ground, the body hits the floor, and I hit rock bottom."
My fav line. I love how you "described" (if that's how you want to say it) death as hitting rock bottom. Though I think death is just the beginning of life, this is a very awesome way of putting it. (Man, am I getting spiritual on you tonight or what?! lol)
Anywhoo, nice nice nice! I liked it alot. Not as morbid as some of your previous works, but also not the happiest. Kindof like it was a "medium" piece. It was nice, had a good tone to it.

always, Irony