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| ihrtbks 2008-05-15 ch 4,  | abuseI like your voice...this story is different from other "sworn enemies" stories. I like how you pick and chose certain scenes to move the story instead of telling the whole story line by line from beginning to end! You may want to work on your transitions. I got lost a few times. And your description is sometimes forced. KEEP IT UP! |
| hypa to hell and back 2008-05-15 ch 4, | abuseit was really good besdies the amount of mistakes i noticed. please give this the once over and correct it ok |
| hypa to hell and back 2008-05-12 ch 3, | abuseits really good i like it alot. |
| HelloLovely 2008-05-11 ch 3, | abuseHey is this the very ending? It's sort of just there. I don't know. I wish it had ended happily... Love, Becca |
| duckliy543 2008-05-11 ch 3, | abusegod i love this please contune but edward is such a dickk. |
| SparklingStar25 2008-05-02 ch 1, | abuseits so cute! pls write more!! |
| Korangstababe 2008-04-28 ch 1, | abusewhoa right more gosh darnit forget one shot |
| hotcheri 2008-04-28 ch 1, | abusehehehe,sizzling! |
| thatsmyname 2008-04-28 ch 1, | abuseAW. This is sweet! I like this. You did a good job! |
| Jess Massacre 2008-04-28 ch 1, | abuseAww, that was such a good story. Very well written and for a one-shot the characters really came alive. The plot is great, and I love this whole story. The ending's great :) |
| TwinkleHeart 2008-04-28 ch 1, | abuseAWW SO KUTE |
| hypa to hell and back 2008-04-28 ch 1, | abusehehe i loved it it just like a normal secnario its a 'i hate you and you hate me but im going to kiss you any way' i like that kind of thing its funny hehe loved it really good |