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| The Hippie Nerd 2008-07-14 ch 1,  | abuseThis piece is amazingly descriptive- vivid, engaging images that don't go overboard and slow the pace down. It's a fine line to walk on and you do it wonderfully. It's a very interesting piece but unfortunately a bit hard to understand overall- it feels incomplete, as if there should be more or you never got around to finishing it. But what is here is great stuff. |
| prick 2008-04-28 ch 1, | abuseOkay. I'm interested. Way to leave me hanging though. You are really talented at description. I can never do it without it seeming awkward, but you've done it perfectly. It's poetic, but it makes sense. You can still picture it with ease. Good job really, I like it. I don't know if it's going to be continued...? This really belongs in a better quality section than young adult. |