This is really creative. I love the imagery, and especially the first two lines: "The sun rips night's/black bedsheet". Keep writing!

I like this a lot. The personification and the exercise metaphor are really amazing and I love the alliteration. Really wonderful piece.

Oh wow this is interesting. Could probably work on it more but great as is. Write on!

~Anna~ ^_^

This is cool. It's artistic and creative. Good job.

+MOUSE