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Julius Gillian 2008-04-29 ch 1,	abuseYou ought to be slapped, punched, and then kissed lovingly for making a last line so unparallel with this entire poem. It makes no sense and more sense than not all together. Ever been to one of those botanical gardens, or gardens they advertise on display and the first thing you noticed was big industry chugging down the plants throats? Yeah well, I gather alot of what you said on this poem and your beliefs show that here. I really like this piece, it shows your resenment for them casually. Your last line was perfect, forget what I said about hitting you you're too pretty to hit. Yes, you're last line was perfect: we've fucked up the envirnoment so much that we'd basically need to get drunk to delude ourselves and see the garden of eden we once lost, or less metaphorically something more beautiful than this artificial wasteland they call a vineyard is. Overall I love your 'food for thought' poetry, you must go around to alot of places, I don't have the time or place other than my beach, which is filthy in its own polluted rights. Anyway, peace.
East-0f-Eden 2008-04-28 ch 1,	abuseI thought it was like neo-romantic (i don't even know if that's a genre but I'm making it up). I like how you said you thought it had to much machinery and it was to flat. not enough drunkenness. that was good. neo-romantic.
losing gracie girl 2008-04-28 ch 1,	abusenice. i like it. wasn't quite expecting that last line. yours until the wind changes, gg