So now I see what you mean by the swearing... ;)

Firstly, you've done an exceptional job with Harper. She's a really strong character, and oftentimes her attitude ticks me off. But it's precisely because she acts so self-centered and egotistical, so I would say you're doing a hell of a job with the characterization.

Interestingly, I wasn't expecting a bandmate/ex guy like Seth to be the love interest when I read the story's summary. (I'm assuming he's the one, or maybe I'm getting ahead of myself...) I guess I was imagining a nobody who she wouldn't think was worth her time. Haha. It's only two chapters into the story, so I'll wait awhile before passing judgment on Seth. So far, he certainly fits the bill for hot, lusty musician. They've got a rather interesting history together, so I'll be looking forward to see how their relationship changes.

Keep writing!

Who.

Harper is a **. Oh well...

As said before, I am falling in love with Seth.

GO GUYLINER! I love that stuff!

That was good. I am procrastinating and it entertained me fully. I will probably fall in love with Seth eventually =]

I quite like this story so far, it's fun and (relatively) upbeat. The characters are interesting, although some of them are slightly stereotypical.

I liked the way in the second chapter you referred to the 'old days' of the band, as if they'd pretty much sold out or w/e, but none of them wanted to. Seems to me that Harper is a bit bitter about that.
Anyway, great start (:

mygod i don't know what to say. all that i can say is that it's ** awesome and i reallyreally want some more right now. xD

I remember this chapter!! :D You finally posted it, lol. :) The ending made me laugh! Great chappie buddy!

Yay! Update!! I LOVED it. Harper is still hilariously bitchy and her and Seth fighting is great. First off...m, guyliner. I understand Harper's reaction completely. Sometimes you just can't help yourself, especially when it involves guyliner. The thought of Seth, who's supposed to be hotter than JET for god's sake, in eyeliner is pretty much...yeah, there's no word for it. Seth can join Cain in the candyshop. Then we can put Jet and Caden in there and me and you can go peruse the shelves at our viewing pleasure. ... Yeah, not going to continue in that train of thought. Anyways...

I loved your song lyrics too! Pretty much ultra tight. You're such a great lyricist. Ha, remember that, when you wrote the 'hey, there delilah' song...ah, good times. Anyway, I liked how the song was all 'love hurts, **'. Cause that's totally how I could see Harper explaining it.

When they woke up together I couldn't help but 'aw'. My friend hates it when I do that. She's always like 'shut up, you don't have a soul!' and then I'm sad. But it was so cute, even when they started hating on each other. I was just looking at the title and I know you've already initialed it to SNAM, but I was just thinking about that and started laughing. I can imagine it with an exclamation point like SNAM! and then it just reminds me of SHAZAM! Do you remember that? Was it a movie or a show and wasn't Shaq in it? I don't really know, but the word makes me laugh. SNAM!

I'm sorry! About not crediting you in my reviewing thingy! I just scroll through real fast and type out the names of the reviewers for the last chapter and I totally forgot about you. I know, how could I do that, you say? I have no attention span and my brain likes potato chips. That is my explanation. And your reviews are monstrous! Like, that last one my brother saw over my shoulder and just shook his head like I'd committed some social faux pas. So you pretty much triumph in the reviewing catagory, putting me to shame.

Anyway, this chapter was AWESOME! For some reason though, I can't wait for Harper's fall from grace. I wonder if this is what's going to start it. Maybe all Seth's fangirls will go rabid and make Harper hate clubs because she kissed Seth in front of them and slowly but surely she'll lose popularity. Oh no! That would be sad but kind of funny at the same time cause I'm a horrible sadist.

Ack, I just thought of something else that made me think of you. A bunch of my friends went to Warped Tour the other day and I didn't get to go...I bet you did, you two dollar **. If you didn't I'm sorry for that last comment, but if you did...okay, I'm still sorry, but why me? Maybe when I stop being so poor I'll get to go to some of these things. Blegh, self-pity's over. *blots eye with tissue daintily and wishes Harper's band were real* That'd be awesome. Well, I'm gonna go now and stop ranting at you about my woe. So I can go imagine Seth and his guyliner...

O.O oh my. update soon

I love it! Silly Harper :S

Awesome first chapter!

I love Harper's tone - how she's sarcastic, witty and confident on the outside...but I'm guessing there is also some vulnerability to her character later on?

Wow you've written so many stories! any tips for a first-timer like me? I've just posted my VERY FIRST chapter ever and i'd be honoured if you would check it out. It's titled 'The Art of Seduction'.

Cheers,
missAtoZ

Ama-a-a-zing! I can't believe it took me so long to get around to reading this. I LOVE Harper, despite her bitchiness. She's friggin hilarious, what with her hatefulness and all that jazz. And I LOVE her name (I also LOVE love in all caps). Harper...that's just tight. And the sex tape bit...I laughed hysterically, then even harder because she didn't care about it.

And Seth...da-a-mn. Imagine a long, drawn out, high pitched black person sort of damn and that's what just came out of my mouth. The man is gorgeous. I thought Jet was the hottest guy you could conjure up, but you continue to amaze me. Seriously, the man is delectible. I'll have to find a picture of someone for you this time to play him.

I also love the fact that everyone in this story is flawed. Sort of makes them more realistic I guess, especially since in a band the members would all be well aware of each others' problems since they're together so much.

Basically, it was ** awesome. I have the funny feeling that the title is going to be oddly appropriate too, just from seeing this little bit of Harper's character. And the ending was so adorable. Just had to add that little bit. Can't wait for more, as per usual. :) Later!

Hehe=] Love this.. pls write more soon=] & Guitar Lessons too ^^

UPdate soon! Can't wait for more!

I don't hate Harper all that much right now. I'm thinking maybe you should make her bitchier because there are still some parts where she's a real softie. Calling her mom, thinking about Seth. If you're doing a "changing to someone better" type of story, I would start with someone that is TOTALLY the opposite of what she's going to become. Right now is what she would be in a work or two of the transformation.

Also, some of your transitions are rough. One moment you're calling someone a hag, than you change to a subject where she's saying she feels bad, which connects with the subject you were talking about BEFORE you were calling that someone a hag.

Other than that though, great piece, update soon, can't wait to read more!

~Cheerios

Okay...nice story. Though Harper really is a **. Well, I hope you update soon. I like the story.

My goodness Queenie, you don't tell them that the main character will improve. Gosh! A great chappie!