interesting beginning...I like the stream of consciousness flow you've got going on...

I liked the dream scene.
However, I was a little confused with this chapter, just because it changed so much. I know all the flashbacks were in italic, but it still confused me just a bit at the part where someone flicks her ponytail. I'm assuming it's the boy she likes? What's his name? I'm not sure if you said or not. But nevertheless, I still liked it.
Update soon!

KatieTheWriter :-)

Interesting addition to the first chapter. I will read the next one now!

Oh my gosh! I love this for so, so many reasons!

1: The first part was building up to something that hooked me in to want more. I liked the Harry Potter part. I love those movies.

2: The line about betting the Prince cd collection had me smiling

3: What made me smile even more, was the referral to The Backstreet Boys! HA. I used to write fanfic about them when I was 13-15 and I posted some on . Embarrassing, yes, but I loved them so much. And I LOVED how you used the songs in this sentence: He saw the shape of her heart, he wanted it that way, and he never got the call.
I'm assuming you were a big fan too or still are. I saw them almost 3 years ago at the age of 20. I felt like I was back to my biggest fan days. HAHA. The coolest part was I sat right next to Brian's wife and their baby in the pit. It was bizzare and the fourteen year old inside of me was in awe.

4: I loved the last part too! Especially the part about the donut and her stealing it from him.

5: I can't wait to read more!


KatieTheWriter :-)