It's a very interesting concept and a great introduction. It's extremely well written, descriptive without being excessivly wordy, just the way I like a story to be.

Well, its definitely interesting! I think the only thing I would suggest is changing the flashback scene, not the content, but putting it in italics or something to make it perfectly clear, because I thought it was a separate storyline or something at first. Maybe you could split it in two, and have half of it when Dawn was asleep the first time in the hospital, and the second half when she passes out in the woods. I really like your werewolf character, he's very...charismatic I suppose. He made me smile :)