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| simpleplan13 2008-05-21 ch 1,  | abuseYou mean kind of what you did to me?.. that line just sounded a bit awkward I like this... the story behind it is good and very realistic. I also like the ending. |
| Lord Of The Marsh 2008-05-16 ch 1, | abuseWow. Slow-moving, but thought-provoking. Very good. Continue in this vein, and you will do well. Godspeed, Lord Of The Marsh |
| kloun doll 2008-05-08 ch 1, | abuse'cause the rhyme I think it sounds more like a song, I like the verses 1 & 3, 1 had good flow |
| FON the Conqueror 2008-05-01 ch 1, | abuseooh, I like it. Especially the small bits of ironic, almost sadistic humor. Very good. But I can't help but ask... what's with all the o's? |
| Take the Money and Run 2008-05-01 ch 1, | abuseI really like this poem, its sad but well written. I really, really, really love the imagery of "walking this broken road." I think its great, and just that line may have given my inspiration for another poem...and I haven't written for a while lol. This is beautiful, keep writing. |
| Twilight Starr 2008-04-30 ch 1, | abuseIt packed a message. Nice work. Have a marvelous day. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| fleur de l'est 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abuseThe saddest thing. |
| Yusuf 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abuseIt's not slipping, you're going through a writer's block. But I like this one. The third stanza was my favourite. ~Yusuf P.S.: This might be of some help: Writing to me, is like crying, never forced. I just write when I feel something, the things I want to say to the other person, but can't. :) |